Interesting. Your writing seems good, and the two girls seem nice, although unusually peaceful together for an Agent pair. I'm also curious as to whether an agent on a scooter would be that unusual - it's PPC headquarters, there are dragons wandering around - and I sort of wish that she'd run missions on the scooter, just because it would be interesting to see how he did. Overall, though, very well-written.
Also, although they're likeable, the personalities you listed didn't really come through, but you said that was to be expected and I look forward to seeing more of them in future missions.
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Date: 2010-05-13 07:16 pm (UTC)Also, although they're likeable, the personalities you listed didn't really come through, but you said that was to be expected and I look forward to seeing more of them in future missions.